I love how even in such a short fic you establish a lot. You start them off cuddling and being comfortable just like, draped over each other, before progressing to sex. You establish their threeway with Matt, and hint at more of a sharing relationship with the rest of the group. And the sex is just, super hot, obviously.
"We'd all have to share you equally, though." "Share me or share my lucky mouth?" he asks. "Both. Laura and Travis could have you at the same time." Taliesin looks up at her. "I'm not sure we're still talking about blowing on dice." "Oh, did you just pick up on that, Mr. Subtlety? Look at you." This is probably my favorite bit. Not just for the intriguing hints of future sharing, but also because you got their voices down so well.
"Yeah," Marisha sighs. "You're so good." She runs her nails across his scalp. "You're a good boy." Taliesin hums, pleased. I swooned, not gonna lie.
After a couple minutes, he hears the click of a cellphone camera, and he glances upwards without stopping his work. "For Matt," Marisha explains, putting her phone back down at her side. "He should get to see what he's missing out on." She strokes his hair and lets out a pleased, shaky breath. "What he gets to come home to later." WHOA! OMG! Did Matt just like, get that at work somewhere? Did he check his phone before getting into his car to drive home and get stuck in awful LA traffic overwhelmingly turned on and desperate to get home? Just ... oh that creates so many fun ideas.
During the next game, Marisha rolls two natural 20s. Maybe there's something to this after all. Hah! Yes! Fantastic!
This fic is delightful thank you so much for writing it!
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Re: "Lucky"; Taliesin/Marisha(/Matt), (implied Taliesin/everybody??)
Date: 2016-10-08 07:14 am (UTC)*fans self frantically*
This was ... omg. WOW. Just ... oh my gods.
I love how even in such a short fic you establish a lot. You start them off cuddling and being comfortable just like, draped over each other, before progressing to sex. You establish their threeway with Matt, and hint at more of a sharing relationship with the rest of the group. And the sex is just, super hot, obviously.
"We'd all have to share you equally, though."
"Share me or share my lucky mouth?" he asks.
"Both. Laura and Travis could have you at the same time."
Taliesin looks up at her. "I'm not sure we're still talking about blowing on dice."
"Oh, did you just pick up on that, Mr. Subtlety? Look at you."
This is probably my favorite bit. Not just for the intriguing hints of future sharing, but also because you got their voices down so well.
"Yeah," Marisha sighs. "You're so good." She runs her nails across his scalp. "You're a good boy."
Taliesin hums, pleased.
I swooned, not gonna lie.
After a couple minutes, he hears the click of a cellphone camera, and he glances upwards without stopping his work.
"For Matt," Marisha explains, putting her phone back down at her side. "He should get to see what he's missing out on." She strokes his hair and lets out a pleased, shaky breath. "What he gets to come home to later."
WHOA! OMG! Did Matt just like, get that at work somewhere? Did he check his phone before getting into his car to drive home and get stuck in awful LA traffic overwhelmingly turned on and desperate to get home? Just ... oh that creates so many fun ideas.
During the next game, Marisha rolls two natural 20s. Maybe there's something to this after all.
Hah! Yes! Fantastic!
This fic is delightful thank you so much for writing it!